Book Review: The Boy In The Smoke

Occasionally we review books here – this is the second novel by our wonderful mentor, Rachel Faturoti. You can read more about Rachel on her own website: https://www.rachelfaturoti.com/about

Cover of The Boy In The Smoke by Rachel Faturoti. Two boys, both Black, lean out from the opposite corners of the cover, trying to touch hands in the centre. The one at the bottom is wearing a green hoodie and has slightly darker skin than the other, who is wearing a pale blue jacket. The background has a marbled blue, pink and green effect in pastel, to give a smoky effect, and the title is in yellow filling most of the jacket. The tag line in the bottom left corner reads: Divided by time, united by hope... can the past change their future?

Title: The Boy In The Smoke

Author: Rachel Faturoti

Suggested readership: ages 9 to 11

Themes and topics: history, workhouses, friendship, young carers, hidden poverty, time-slip, 19th century

When Isaiah lights up an old fireplace in the basement of his block of flats, he opens a channel of communication across time. The flickering fire and smoke connects Isaiah to another boy, Jacob, who lives in the 19th century. Jacob has a mystery he desperately needs Isaiah to help him solve so that he can escape the workhouse.

Isaiah, too, is living with many challenges in the present day – but he is trying to hide them from the world. Together, the boys work to discover what has happened to Jacob’s father. Will Isaiah be able to help Jacob, and crucially, accept help and friendship himself before something disastrous happens?

Although this novel has fantasy mechanics in the form of the time-crossing fire, in both time periods the roots of the story are deeply planted in the hard reality of poverty in one of the richest countries in the world. While this is a moving and interesting story of friendships developing, it is also educational, showing that things haven’t changed as much as they should have done over the years. Isaiah’s courage and positivity make him a likeable character, and the way he struggles to balance two different lives at school and home, is very relatable. The idea of making the fire itself – with its constantly moving, magical flames – the method of communicating across time, is a unique and exciting image that feels just right for the story. This would be a great buy for the school library or for a keen reader at Christmas. I thought it would pair especially well with A Christmas Carol because of the focus on the 19th century and the division between rich and poor.
– Leila Rasheed

Reflections on the application stage: what did we learn?

It seems incredible that it has been seven years since Megaphone Mentoring opened for applications for the very first time. Since then we have mentored 13 brilliantly talented mentees in total, of whom 7 are now either published or signed with literary agents. Our wonderful judging team of editors has now selected our 8 mentees for this year, and every unsuccessful applicant has been offered 30 minutes feedback with Stephanie King or Leila Rasheed and membership of the Community group on BAND. I thought at this stage, some reflections might be interesting to anyone who is thinking of applying in the future.

General observations on the applications: Both Stephanie and I read all the applications and thought this year they were of a very high standard. We saw lots of confident writing, assured pacing, laugh-out-loud humour, entrancing description and fresh originality of voice and concept. This year we noticed a lot of Gothic or dark comic fantasies, which were very welcome. There were also some really strong contemporary YA voices that instantly struck us as compelling and authentic. On the other hand, sometimes, we’d see writing where the actual narrative was much less engaging and dynamic than the dialogue – it’s always good to remember that the narrator has to be characterised too.

The biggest problems we saw suggested that the writer had perhaps not read enough contemporary children’s or teenage fiction, and thus were not sure of the narrative voice. Reading one or two books is not enough; it has to be a passion. Stephanie King has started a book club for Megaphone Community to encourage more reading of contemporary children’s books.

Sometimes, we saw very good writing that seemed to be for adults rather than for children or teenagers. Stories need to be from the perspective of young people. YA will tend to look forward, not back – readers live in the moment with the main character. While books don’t have to be in the first person, it can be helpful to write a bit in first person to get into the character’s mindset.

A very strong original concept, by a less experienced writer, might in the end stand out to judges more than high quality of writing with an unclear story or over-familiar concept. Concept is also a factor in how publishable a book is. To know whether you have an original concept or not you need to read lots and lots of contemporary books in your intended age group – spend some time in the children’s / YA section of a large bookshop like Waterstones and look at what is on the tables.

A slow pace to the story was sometimes a problem, as were child characters who were too passive, spending the time watching or listening to lectures from adult characters. Sometimes dialogue felt forced and wooden because it was there mainly to get information across to the reader rather than being something that a child might actually say . Especially with fantasy or science fiction, where world-building is difficult to get right, dense writing was sometimes a problem. Choosing a telling detail, and not trying to put too much information into a single sentence, is important. A good critique group or someone to read your writing over is very useful.

Most applications were for books intended for 9 and up, and we would love to see more applicants writing chapter books for younger readers (to date, picture books have been outside of the scope of the scheme)

We’re always interested in the statistics so we can find out who we’re reaching:

This time round we received 55 eligible applications, very slightly fewer than last time we ran (58). Applications tend to number around 55 to 60, which is less than some competitions but I think reflects the fact that applicants are signing up to a demanding and serious year of writing. Of these, a shortlist of 16 was sent to the judges. As stated on the website, we were looking for applications that we felt could reach a publishable standard in a year, and in cases of equal merit, we gave preference to
– those resident in an Arts Council England Priority Place
– those who had not received similar mentoring before

  • Just under a quarter of applicants stated they were resident in an Arts Council England Priority Place.
  • 90.9% stated they had not received mentoring as a children’s writer before.
  • 80% of applicants were applying for the first time (unsuccessful applicants were welcome to re-apply).
  • Most applicants are based in London or Birmingham, although we received applications from most areas of the country. This is similar to other years, and reflects a higher ethnic minority population in those cities.
  • As in other years, we had applications from a wide range of ethnicities, including mixed and complex ones, in proportions broadly reflecting the ethnic make-up of England. We had fewer applications from BESEA applicants than last year, when Maisie Chan was involved. This tells us that having a particular, intentional focus can be effective in drawing applications from particular groups, and is something we will continue to bear in mind when designing future schemes.
  • Most people heard about us through word of mouth/ personal recommendations from mentors or former mentees. Others mentioned hearing about it from the RCW workshop, the Jericho Prize, Write Mentor, All Stories, Middleway Mentoring. It’s heartening to see schemes supporting each other, and to see a small but mighty network of organisations growing up who are eager to break down barriers for new writers so children and teenagers can get the wonderfully diverse bookshelves they deserve.

And that’s it – I hope that’s useful to future applicants or anyone interested in the scheme. We’re very excited to get going on the mentoring and will be back soon with a bit more information about the talented mentees and their projects for the next year!
– Leila Rasheed

Announcing our 2023 -2024 mentees!

We are absolutely delighted to announce that our 8 mentees for 2023 into 2024 will be:

  • Asli Jensen
  • Mahishika Karunaratne
  • Ruth Lindup
  • Jemma Rose
  • Lubna Saleh
  • Shivanthi Sathanandan
  • Kiana Thorpe
  • Emma Zipfel

CONGRATULATIONS! We are thrilled to be working with a group of writers with such huge potential. The standard of applications was extremely high this year, which makes their achievement all the more impressive. We will be adding a page to the website in due course with more information about each writer and the writing project they will be focusing on this year.

We would like to warmly thank everyone who applied, and hope they will join us on the BAND group for the fully funded series of writer development workshops we’re hosting there. A joining link has been sent out and all applicants should now have received it plus an offer of feedback.

We’d like to thank our wonderful judging team of editors, who kindly volunteered their time. Heartfelt thanks also go to our funders: Arts Council England National Lottery Project Grants, The Authors’ Licensing and Collecting Society, and author Tọlá Okogwu who generously sponsored fees for two mentoring places.

Update on the mentoring scheme

Quick update: the judges have met and discussed the shortlist! If you applied to the scheme, please keep an eye on your inbox this week – and remember that we offer fully-funded creative writing workshops, Q&As with publishing professionals and more to every applicant regardless of success (you should already have had an email from Stephanie King about joining the Band group so you can access these).

And that’s a wrap!

Update: We closed to applications at midnight, 31/08/23. We’d like to give our warmest thanks to everyone who applied. Our first impressions are of a very high standard of applications – we’re excited!

If you applied, you should have received an email confirming receipt. If you have not, contact us and let us know.

What happens now?
The judges will meet at the end of September so you will hear whether you have a place on the mentoring scheme in very early October, and would meet your mentor as soon as possible after that.

If possible, we’ll let those who have got a place in the Community group (the first 60 applicants to apply) know during September. You can read about Community here: https://megaphonewrite.com/megaphone-mentoring-community-2023/ – scroll down to download a document with full details about what’s on offer, including dates of events so you can plan to attend.

We do offer feedback, and will be in further touch about this once the mentees have been selected.

Thank you for applying! We’ll be in touch soon.

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We close to applications at midnight TONIGHT

It’s your last chance to apply for mentoring in 2023 – 2024! People of colour in England with a passion for children’s or YA literature: work 1-1 with a published author to bring your book to the best possible point, learn the ins and outs of the industry from editors and agents, and get your writing to their attention.
Please see the website for full details and to apply.

Get that post-submission glow: unpublished writers of colour, send us your books for kids 8+ before midnight tonight!

We close to applications tomorrow!

Folk, it’s nearly your last chance to apply for this round of Megaphone mentoring – we close to applications at midnight on 31/08/23. Thank you so much to everyone who has applied already, we are really enjoying reading the applications – there is a lot of talent out there! If you haven’t received an acknowledgement of receipt, do get in touch, just in case your application has failed to reach us for some reason – we would hate to miss it.

Finally, a special shout-out of THANK YOU to Community member Maritsa Grey who has produced our gorgeous graphics such as the one below, and helped us with getting the word out to press!

Information: Megaphone submissions are open. Apply now until midnight on 31/08/23 for 1-1 mentoring as a children's writer. Full details are on our website.
You can apply now for mentoring in 2023 – 2024

Have you received an acknowledgement for your application?

Our application period closes in a few days. If you have sent in an application you should have received an acknowledgement from megaphone.writeATgmail.com . If you have not received an email to this effect, please check your junk email folder (gmail addreses sometimes get filtered out) and if you can’t find one, please email me so I can double check we have received your application – we’d hate to miss it!

One week left to apply for Megaphone mentoring

Applications close on 31/08/23 at midnight. We’re looking forward to reading your writing! For full details see our website.

“I want to say a huge thank you to both of you as without Megaphone I
would have not have got to this point!” (signing with ASH Literary Agency)  “The scheme helped me so much with my writing and also having access to agents via the scheme and the open door session in the Community helped me to make this decision with some prior knowledge on what to look out for in an agent. “

Abimbola Fashola, Megaphone Mentee (2022)

Just over two weeks left to apply for Megaphone Mentoring!

We’re excited to read your application and to discover some wonderful new voices in children’s literature! The first 60 applicants will get also free career and writing development workshops over the course of a year, so there’s nothing to lose by applying for mentoring. For all the information you’ll need, have a look at the FAQs page and the Resources page. You can read more about the background to the scheme in this article I wrote for The Asian Writer: https://theasianwriter.co.uk/2023/08/10/megaphone-why-i-set-up-a-scheme-for-childrens-writers-of-colour/

The closing date is midnight, 31/08/2023 .